Just a little something I wrote. Pardon the dust, but I wrote it on the spur of the moment on a forum.. so I had to paste it a section at a time. It is grouped so I could easily paste it a bit at a time.
One thing, IT IS PORN. XXX. Don't look unless over 18!
YOU ARE WARNED.
http://rapidshare.com/files/110721226/Leo_and_Lilly.txt.html
Good for most people. Amazing for people with a transformation fetish.
As I said, spur of the moment. I had already done an outline, but I skimmed some stuff on purpose. At a later date I am going to go back and brush it up.. expand some ideas.
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I am a male to female transsexual. This blog focuses on retelling stories of my childhood centering around gender dysphoria. It's mostly just a way of finally getting all this baggage off my chest. I'm done transitioning, but there is so much of my life I've never shared with anyone. I'm done hiding who I am.
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4 comments:
I liked it! I, er, read it for the rich characterization and fascinating paranormal elements, of course...>.>
Anyhow, critical comments: the dialog felt wonky at times, and requires fine tuning; also, you used "easy" instead of ease, so their might be other syntax errors. but overall, it was nice, I liked it was more about getting to know the characters and not just, erm...what is usually the whole of this type of story.
all in all, I think future versions of the story could be even better!
I enjoyed reading this. Like you said, it needs a little editing, but I like how Leo's choice in the end isn't either one or the other, but as close as he can get to "both/and".
How did he pick both? It seemed fairly.. definitive what his choice was.
What do you mean, exactly?
Also, yeah, I need to reread it and edit it. Also, originally it was going to be.. furry. Well, brad was going to be furry, and Leo was going to be furry. Lilly and.. uh.. the girl(forget her name.. damn) were going to be normal.
I think it works better with the cast all one "species" if it were all anthro, or all human, then it feels like less explaining is needed for the world's back-story, it's easier to take the setting for granted.
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